My name is Daniel Martin De Caries Goncalves and i live in a flat with my brother, my mum ,my sister and my dog, my turtle and my three fish. I also used to have a hamster called Coco because of his grey-ish brown fur, but Unfortunately he died last year. It may seem that I have a lot of pets but to me it is completely normal even though to other people it is quite a lot of animals in our house since our flat is quite small compared to an ordinary house but I am used to it now.
When I was five my gran dad had adopted an ostrich, and he gave it a room to share with a blue macaw. Obviously they shared the room since they were both birds. I don’t remember what gender they were but they still were very fun to play with. But my problem was that my gran dad lives in Venezuela, so I would only be able to go once a year since it was so expensive.The last time I went to Venezuela was when I was nine, but since then my grandma came to England for a month like when I go to Venezuela for one month. But now I don’t go to Venezuela because of political issues.
As you can guess I really want to go to Venezuela to see my grandad, but I can’t go until next year because the prime minister was part of a gang but soon they are going to change the primeminister and I will be able to go there once things have calmed down and when it is safer there.As you should now by now I am Venezuelan, English and I am also Portuguese because of my grandparents although my mom was born in Venezuela. My dad is also Portuguese.
My birthday is coming on the 30th of April so I want to go to Algarve, because my grandparents moved to Portugal, so I want to see them for my birthday.
On a completely different note I am a bit sad because soon my sister is going to move out and it feels strange because she has lived with me my whole life and I’m so used to seeing her going to work in the morning. I will also miss my nephew, although he isn’t my sisters son but my soon to be brother in law’s son, he is still part of the family.
On a happier note when my sister moves out I will have my own room, because now I am sharing a room with my older brother. But this isn’t so happy because my sister is going to take most of the furniture so I will have to go to ikea and my experiences with my mum in ikea took hours, and for some weird reason we went IKEA for mothers day but I didn’t mind because it was mothers day after all.
this has been a description of my life, I hope you enjoyed it.
May 27, 2016 at 10:37 am
I like the part wih the ostrich – this is really unusual. How might you develp this?
You must now:
1) Re-read and edit spelling – look at the difference between new and knew, there and their
2) Always re-read and edit your sentence structures – where are there words missing? How can your meaning be made clearer?
3) Does your piece have a definite ending?
June 13, 2016 at 4:25 pm
You have very nearly completed your autobiography but not just yet.
You have nearly achieved the genre badge, but you’re not quite there. You must now re-read and edit spelling, focusing on homphones (there, their and they’re) – which should you use and when?
Re-read and edit your work – how might you make your meaning clearer?
June 14, 2016 at 12:56 pm
Autobiography achieved! – Well done!
You are able to make your meanings clear and tell the interesting parts of a story.
Your next move is to think carefully about how to craft your sentences. Will you use a short or long sentence to express yourself? Why?